Andrew
Yes. But you need to put it in this first sentence. You need to take out the period and explain what happened to Helen Keller when she was a baby.
Taplow
She cannot see and cannot listen sound.
Andrew
Are you writing about the past or the present?
Taplow
Past! Helen Keller dead.
Andrew
Yes. She died. She's dead.
Taplow
She lost sight.
Andrew
Yes! She lost her sight. Very good!
Taplow
Very bad.
Andrew
Yes. We English teachers sound heartless, don't we. The loss is bad. The English is good. Then you say she "could not listen sounds." You need to say that she couldn't hear. We listen to music
Taplow
"To dream the impossible dream!"
Andrew
Very good, Taplow. But we hear sounds. Then you write "Here tutor Serivan, she could not see well." What do you need to say instead of "here tutor"?
Taplow
Her?
Andrew
Yes. Her tutor. And who is Serivan?
Taplow
She tutor.
- Andrew
Her tutor. Helen Keller's tutor. But her name wasn't Serivan. Do you mean Sullivan?
Taplow.
Yes! Serivan.
Andrew
You need to check your spelling. Then you write "Her tutor Sullivan, she could not see well." What word do you need to take out?
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